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The title of this paper is too generic. It should include an original title that reflects your thesis.
This introduction is still missing a clear argumentative thesis statement at the end. It must argue for or against something, present a solution to a problem, or defend a position. It may not just present information on a subject. For what, specifically, are you advocating and why? Be direct. The thesis statement should identify your claim, as well as your three specific points of discussion. This should be your focus throughout the rest of the paper.
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The rest of this paper has the same problem. It reads as an informative paper rather than argumentative one. What is the problem that needs addressing? What is the proposed solution? It is not clear. This paper lacks a clear targeted focus. Narrow your scope and stick to the 1500 word requirement.
This paper should include the use of some direct quotes. You must utilize all of the ways to incorporate research information into your writing. Use the link here to review: https://writingcenter.ashford.edu/quoting-paraphrasing-summarizing
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